The firmament
is anything but firm.
Unrelenting drama queen,
she drops rain one day
flakes snow the next
bolts lightning at night
breezes balm at dawn.
But who would want to trade?
She, too, hosts doves
whose cooing soothes, cozies
up to trees and their leaves’
cleansing cells, shares
sheets of satiny scent, fresh
from sweet clover’s homeplace.
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I’ve read this like five, ten times, and I don’t think I’ll ever not be in awe of it. Absolutely fantastic!
Thank you so much. That means a lot coming from you.
The nature-based alliteration makes me feel as if I’m walking through a flowering meadow. You’ve done a wonderful job immersing readers in your interpretation of nature!
The sounds here are so nicely laid. I love “whose cooing soothes, cozies…”
Nancy – What a beautiful poem! That weather in the first stanza sure describes Kentucky – Last stanza lines are very hypnotic and comforting.
The rhythm and music is fantastic.
I agree with Linda, your use of rhythm & music is wonderful.
Love the way the title grounds and drops me away into the poem!
Wowsers:
drops rain one day
flakes snow the next
bolts lightning at night
breezes balm at dawn.
good verbs
Loving these sounds and the way we enter the poem through that play on words. Lovely!
I like how the tone shifts from the first stanza (sarcastic, almost sardonic) to reverence in the second. Really nice!
What a beauty of a poem, Nancy! The repeated vowel sounds in the lines “She, too, hosts doves / whose cooing soothes, cozies / up to trees and their leaves” was mesmerizing. Love the idea of the firmament as “Unrelenting drama queen.”
Love the wordplay on “firmament” and “firm.” Also lovely sounds as always–“bolts lightning at night/breezes balm at dawn,” for example. And that question in the middle: fantastic!