Together in
The boy works the sun from dawn till dusk
Wrestling with rays of the piercing light
In a daily path across the land
Lunar gloom is the girl’s nightly toil
In deft hands she weaves the silver thread
Glowing loom she sets to wax and wane
Helpless the two when they’re forced apart
Together found on the moonless night
21 thoughts on "Together in"
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love this fairytale. It would make a sweet children’s picture book
Thank you, Gaby!
The language sings. Great visuals.
Thanks, Virginia!
I love the shape and how it aligns with the content. It’s a very visual piece!
Thanks for reading, Shaun!
Love the use of white space to show distance.
Especially love “she weaves the silver thread”
Thanks, Pam! The white space was a last-second change I wasn’t sure about.
Nice! Your use of negative space works well here.
Thank you, Kevin!
Oh, this is so good! Love the mention of wax and wane with the moon (or moonless) Yes, that space works well!
I appreciate it, Sylvia!
Beautifully written love story using great word choice and white space!
Thank you, Linda!
Nice write, Eric. It evokes a universal longing for partnership in me.
Thank you, Jeremy! I’m glad you picked up on that sense of longing I was going for.
A lovely creation, a mythic tale, told in your unique style!
Thank you, Greg, as ever!
Eric, I like the storybook ending!
Thanks, John!
With my feet in the air and my head on the ground
Try this trick and spin it.
The first thought was, where is my mind.