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have you ever been from : have you ever been : have you ever been from : a wound : it’s easy : we are each walking with one : mine is shaped like : a door : heart : with its valves spilling : mine is two girls with dark wrists : fighting for sunlight : hot tar : of a parking lot : have you ever been from : from : from : where is your fromness : from : is it a field : does it smell like : jasmine : like prayer : in your fromness : does the street open : with hands : in your fromness : is there a woman you love : is there a photo of her : as a child : in your fromness does it rain : in sheets : all at once : like sleep : tell me the name of your fromness : i’ll start : moon : warm milk : cockroach : do you know : the soft : of its elbow : do you know : it’s called : mercy : have you ever walked around your fromness : in circles : have you been afraid : of its tender : are you : are you getting closer : to the middle : are you getting closer : to the middle
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“mine is two girls with dark wrists”
This line is amazing and this is one of my favorite poems this month.
Thank you for sharing!
thank you so much!! i’m honored :’)
I appreciate the way you use colons to emphasize the significance of each phrase. Your juxtaposition of “moon: warm milk: cockroach” is jarring in the best way; it forces the reader to think, which is what timeless poetry does. I also enjoy the line “tell me the name of your fromness” both because it reminds me of Lewis Carroll and because of its depth. Well done!
thank you for pulling that first image! that is what i intended and i am glad it came through 🙂
Love this! “does it rain : in sheets : all at once : like sleep” is my favorite. The format is great. I love the repetition and the nagging/overlapped rhythm. Good work!
thank you!! <3
I love the rhythms of this piece! This form is so compelling.
would love to see you write a version in this form, shaun!
Your poetry is organic and powerful, I’ve enjoyed each one this month. Thanks for sharing, and please keep writing : writing / writing!