with wind or without
one ring per
year to grow
one year per
ring to rot
wind and rain
shed some bark
air dried hard
armored heart
huge log down
just past half
in still air
on the path
on the path
free of time
laid out long
lost my way
from first count
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that cycled fast!
maybe needs more linebreaks. 🙂
Ring count
and
” Air dried hard
armored heart ”
For me it works as it sits.
Quick and getting quicker.
Hey this is neat, doing this all together. Working on tomorrow I needed three syllables. I got ” ring kept time ” idea from this
Thank you sir 🙂
lovely. i got locked in to 3 syllable prhases all weekend…
free of time
laid out long
lost my way
from first count
Great ending!
I like the speed and format of this, as well as this powerful phrase:
“free of time
laid out long…”
Your titles always catch my eye, and your poems are little puzzles I like to enjoy!
Great. Last stanza evokes how hard it is to count tree rings. Maybe someday the tree will count ours.
Agree with others comments. Love the shape and cadence of this poem.
Especially like:
air dried hard
armored heart