A Geography of Endurance Day 5
Mountaintop Removal
Most of the men in my family worked coal.
One grandfather ran dozers,
the other bathed in axle grease.
My father lit powder charges—
each blast shook the hollows
until the ridges answered back.
I moved to Lexington for lab work,
drawing blood in a clean white coat.
My Seattle supervisor once stopped
on a mountain road, pocketed a lump of coal,
and placed it proudly on his desk like a trophy.
I had breathed that dust since birth.
They call it mountaintop removal—
a clearing of every tree and living root.
When I lost the foothills of Johnson County,
the flat blue horizon of central Kentucky
felt like an open wound.
They seed the scars with cheap fescue.
True restoration is slower—
native hardwoods, patient succession.
I began with moss and small truths:
a break in the clouds,
the rhythm of walking.
I am no longer the peak I was.
My plateau is wider now.
The sun reaches me all at once—
I have traded height
for room to grow a deciduous soul.
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A good way to show the complexities of childhood and growing up. I like the idea of a “deciduous soul.”
ME TOO! Thank you, L. Coyne!
I really enjoyed the movement of each stanza and how balanced the poem is. Love the color story from coal to the image of “drawing blood in a clean white coat” to blues, mosses. Shew!
Thank you for always reading closely, Shaun!
Had me here, Jeremy: “Most of the men in my family worked coal.” The first stanza not only shows the generations but their jobs. Whew! to this description: “bathed in axle grease.” And, “clean white coat” speaks the contrast between home and Lexington lab job. And you ground it effectively with “I had breathed that dust since birth.”
That grandpa always said “I take a bath once a month, whether I need it or not” lmao
Thank you, Pam!
Keep telling your story. Sharing about the men in your family, your work, feeling the consequences of what’s been in eastern Kentucky is all very meaningful.
Thank you, Linda! I definitely have more to share. I appreciate you recognize the meaningfulness!
Wow, Linda just said ,Oh!!! You have to go read Jeremy. 😀
This is incredible and we were talking earlier about ” telling the story”
Greg Orr has a line something like ” all we have is words, to reveal the rose, that the rose obscures.”
This is what we do, words.
Incredible writing Jeremy.
You two really flatter me; I’ve looked up to you both since I joined this community! Thank you so much for always encouraging me, even when my work wasn’t as good.
I heard this today ❤️
“the birthplace
of creativity—
is vulnerability”
Great poem! I loved the last line about growing a deciduous soul.
Thanks for connecting! I am looking forward to reading your work.
I love the way the persona shifts here to (as I read it), the mountain itself.
BTW, one of my Franciscan brothers was very active in Eastern KY, out of Hazard, some years ago in the movement against “mountaintop removal.” I visited during that time and learned a bit of what you must have lived trhough.
I like this reading/interpretation a lot! That’s very interesting Greg, I’ll be excited to share more with you and also read more of your work.
I lobe the way this poem unfolds. Just layer after layer. I particularly love this:
“each blast shook the hollows
until the ridges answered back.”
and
“They call it mountaintop removal—
a clearing of every tree and living root.
When I lost the foothills of Johnson County,
the flat blue horizon of central Kentucky
felt like an open wound.”
This poem is one of my favorites you’ve written. Great write!
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Thank you so much H.A.!
That means a lot since it is such a personal piece.
*love the way this poem unfolds
Sorry. Not wearing my glasses.
LMAO
Being a fellow Eastern Kentuckian, I can relate to the deep roots of your words. There is great meaning in this poem.
Always nice to meet a fellow Eastern, Kentuckian! I’m glad this resonated with someone else from the area.
“a deciduous soul” is brilliant
Thank you, Gaby! There were many other versions of this line but this one just felt right.
Once again, Jeremy, your growth as a poet astonishes me. The gravity of these beautifully crafted lines is stunning. What have you been putting in your Wheaties, young man?
Thank you, Kevin! You and many other people in this community have always encouraged me and I’m very appreciative. And I’ll say it again, it all made sense what direction I needed to go after I read Smoke!
Mountaintop removal takes more than coal. It takes culture; it takes history; it takes memory; it takes … everything. Great poem, Jeremy. Gonna be a great book.
I couldn’t agree more, Lee!
You render your story and experience so well!
Thank you, Linda!
This is wonderful. I really love in the beginning where you note “bathed in axle grease” and then just a bit further down you mentioned “drawing blood in a clean white coat”. I also just love “deciduous soul”. Thank you for continuing to share your work, Jeremy!
Beautifully written. I especially liked “each blast shook the hollows / until the ridges answered back.” And I felt the loss of Johnson County in this piece. Well done, sir.
Thank you, Eric. I’m glad we connected. I am looking forward to reading more of your work, and I loved the typewriter poem today.
Love the turn in this poem, beginning with the delightful line:
I began with moss and small truths:
“I am no longer the peak I was.
My plateau is wider now.
The sun reaches me all at once—
I have traded height
for room to grow a deciduous soul.”
For me deciduous is the key word here. I didn’t read it as in reference to the mountain, I saw it as a metaphor for the poet’s phenomenal personal growth.
That is indeed how I intended it to be, Laverne!
felt like an open wound
yes to me too
Love the storytelling here and these lines in particular:
“I began with moss and small truths:
a break in the clouds,
the rhythm of walking.”
Jeremy – Your poems build such layers jobs/families/locations/feelings – just awesome to read your work this year! I echo the sentiments above of working on a book! (I’ll leave room on my bookshelf!)
I agree that this is a wonderful poem, Jeremy. I especially love: “They seed the scars with cheap fescue.” And that entire stanza. I hope I’m not overstepping, but I’m not sure the final 2 lines do this poem justice. Lack of sentimentality is one of the poem’s greatest strengths. I suggest an ending more subtle, something more like the lines Chelsie quotes above.
I love the criticism tbh. I’m interested in writing the best poetry possible. I might just cut the entire last stanza. Thanks!