but
there is in the desert
a well dry and dusty
vast, the stranger
parched and burned
looms over and looking,
drops a single word inside
leaving her shadow
to wait for the clink
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The brief lines separated by white space help create a sense of the sparse and lonely tone if the piece.
that’s just what I was hoping for – thank you!
Yay! Hi Arwen!
I love the spacing too. It feels like a well, going down down down. Love that it ends in clink.
“but” … and the whole world opens! Ahhhh! Looking forward to writing with you this month!
I love your comments Emily, it brought me further insight on this beautiful poem by Arwen! Arwen, thank you for the hope. The page and a word open insurmountable potential 🙂
Thanks so much Mary 🙂
Yay Em!! Happy June, I’m looking forward to it. Thank you for this 🙂
I love the way this poem leaves, literally and figuratively, for the reader to enter it.
Thank you!
I really enjoy how “vast, the stranger” are included in the same line. Great title.
I’m glad – I played around with it but thought it left more possibility. Thank you!
Sense of solitude and danger. Also mystery “drops a single word inside.” A poem to read again.
Thanks Mary 🙂
Wow. Poem is mysterious and very effective. Love “leaving her shadow/to wait for the clink.”
I am not sure now if she has left the shadow (what I originally meant) or left the shadow there. And I like that I do not even know which I prefer. Thank you Linda!
I’m hooked and want to know more about this stranger
Thanks Gaby!
I think the most interesting thing is that The Stranger can leave her shadow behind to perform tasks. 🙂
Wouldn’t that be nice, like Peter Pan but on purpose. Thank you!
dropping words in the well. stones in the abyss. i hear it and see it.
That’s about how it feels. Thanks Alissa <3
and the title! that’s sneaky and so effective…
visuals and audio on this poems – so strong!
Thank you Julia!! I love to be sneaky lol