It’s Like Riding A Bike
she whispers in my
sleep-filled mouth a slender foot
now gathering need
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Love the way that center line flows without stop, creating three readings in one tiny space. And the hope the title adds.
I like how you use the title to suggest familiarity. The context really adds to the poems brevity and intimacy.
I’ve gotta agree with Joseph Nichola too, on the use of enjambment in that second line. A very nice touch!
I love short poems that convey so much,
Ahh! I like when the title flows into the next line. I find myself doing that unintentionally. But this. Whew! Few lines holding so much passion.
Who is “she”? Whose foot is that in line two? Gathering need for what? I know this is a haiku, but does it need to be? I think it needs to be fleshed out a bit.
Enjoy your MFA studies. Such a special time.
Fair assessment. I was attempting to show some day 1 restraint. How silly of me. BTW — your chili recipe last summer is STILL on my mind and one of my absolute favs. Thanks for the kind words about Hollins. I’m super excited!! I’ll look forward to any feedback you throw my way this month, Tom. Always appreciated!!
Found you! I don’t think I’ve ever seen a haiku of yours—I love “sleep-filled mouth”.
We’re really going to miss you 🖤
Ahhhhh. Sigh.
As someone who hasn’t written much since December (lol) this feels like writing in June to me. Happy Lexpomo!
You get me, girl!
I want to comment on your bio–so much fun! (Mine is super-boring & technical). Congrats on going for your MFA! I just graduated from Solstice (in Boston) in Jan. 2022 & loved every minute of it! Except that all but my first residencies were on Zoom.
This hooked me to your poems … from day one!