Cast Your Taproot
sudden laughter like
the world rushing in
the wild the
sweet the mother
song the crown of
~ Erasure of Dorianne Laux’s poem “Heart of Thorns”
Delightful. The spacing of your erasures makes me think of e.e. cummings, and this one reminds me of him in other ways too. The line “Strum the tumble of sudden laughter” is crazy good.
Thanks. I’m just arranging them on the page, where those actual words were in the source text.
Yes I know. Cummings’ spacing had different motives, and yet it’s remarkably similar on the page.
Wow, Karen! As I sit here in the “mud of pain” I can relate. This is a wonderful jumble of sounds!!
Thank you, Nancy!
And that line, “Unleash the wild the sweet the mother song …” just beautiful.
Thank you, Bill!
Oh, this is my favorite erasure so far. It’s so energetic and full of sounds, full of joy and wildness.
Thank you, Linda!
Karen, this is one of your best. “Singing mud of pain.” – Love.
Good choice of Dorianne Laux’s work and your honor of it.
Thank you, Sylvia!
This was a beautiful and joyous read. Thank you for sharing it
Shaun, thank you!
Looked up erasure poem, a form unfamiliar to me. Yours will always be the one that encourages me to give a hand at it.
Title ‘Cast Your Tap Root’ caught me into a beautiful and brilliant read. Uplifting!
“Cross the singing mud,” “strum the tumble”–your erasures always surprise & delight.