First Second Thoughts
Poems might be
a perfect place to complain———(let it all out—unedited)
But you might rather take a deep breath——-(air-condition the brain)
and begin fresh ————(like a new person focused on the future)
than saddle the back of a rattle snake———-(and ride stupidly)
making a scene——(blah, blah, blah— loudly raising hell all over the place)
over lost yesterdays—-(unearthed failed days, places, things…)
and transgressions —-(people tied to pangs of longing and regret)
that should best stay— (aren’t you thinking about those things right now)
forgotten ————————(well, good luck with that)
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“stupidly” should read “wildly”
Format fits perfectly with the poem- fun to read
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But you might rather take a deep breath——-(air-condition the brain)
Hey Julia! Thank you so much for reading through this–it just came about and became a form of its own..was not sure if it worked..but it made some kind of see-saw sense so I gave it a try. Thanks for your comments!
Saddle the back of a rattlesnake and ride wildly how did you know do you have some X-ray vision that travels all the way to the earthquake state?? Really like the motion potion in this poem Ann matches my mood honest! great job!!!
Thanks for your comments Darlene…!
Thanks Anne for reminding me that poems don’t have to be in typical square stanzas! Like this innovative approach!
Many thanks…out on a limb..but was hoping it held up.
I appreciate your comments..Thank you!