jonah #2
if it will move you
at last
if the gods breathe
mercy
thereafter
if the auger has seen its truth among the gulls–
i will do it.
i will bring that
truth down
if the currents demand a trade–
blood for wind,
blood for wind, blood for wind, blood for wind—
let it be
mine.
i am not afraid.
i will have loved
well and utterly
sing a song for me,
a good one, for my at last
becoming
the waves.
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originally did not have that last “at last”…want to cut it for economy but think that might mess up the music of it. does provide symmetry with the opening stanza…feel like the image hits you harder without the ‘at last’ though. hmm.
It does provide symmetry, but I think the poem moves better toward the close without it in that placement. It is a lovely, intriguing poem.
thanks…yeah i think i want to cut it…rhythm feels a little stunted or sudden without it but maybe that is apt considering the poem’s end.
Gods, I’m loving your work this year, Candace.
Keep going!
Thankyou!
Sorry i didn’t see this until now because it has made my day. The singing rhythm of this poem is just like rocking on a boat at sea–you’ve captured this very well. Yes, you are rolling through the poems, C.