Left Ajar
Eighty-two thousand
four hundred twelve words
in the fourth revision:
a scorched Midwest landscape
imagined, written, edited, rewritten,
and then, like a barn riddled
with rotten beams, abandoned.
Young Luna left alone
poised at the gate left ajar—
Rising action swirls in my memory
like shingles in a tornado;
falling action settles thick on barren fields
edged with hardscrabble hangers on
honeysuckle, chokecherry,
plastic debris, tiny rodents, ants,
beetles, skinny scavengers
a few lizards eke life
from exhausted soil I once seeded
with hopes, watered with gentle feedback,
plot raked up stone by stone, pulled apart
fortified with better dialogue
and still
lost to drought, after all that.
Even now, I think of Luna, at that gate.
Sometimes as I walk (all these years later)
a hawk circles above, broad-winged cruciform
shadow dogging my path,
like a dark angel
watching for breath in the stillness.
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love “like a barn riddled with rotten beams, abandoned”
Might you pick it back up?
I love your list of “hardscrabble hangers on,” Elaine.
Very intriguing poem—about an abandoned novel, I’m thinking, though not entirely sure. The last stanza is really compelling.