Never Get…
Never get too tired.
Never get too hungry.
Never get too bored.
Never get too lonely.
Vice had me
long before
I made it home.
It was all I could think
to do for the night.
No written word.
No companionship.
Just gimme more of my drug
and it never seems enough.
Never get too high.
Never get too easy.
Never get too sad.
Never get too empty.
Now I’m filled
with all of these chemicals,
both consumable
and woven through the brain.
But they are not designed
to be forever states.
A spiraling begins, and
all the fuel gets dumped.
Now I’m hollow,
so hollow,
and what was hallowed
is conflagration–
now there’s a man
who never learned
how to overcome his own heat.
Never get too angry.
Never get too desp’rate.
Never get too lost.
Never get too loveblind.
This is
poetry for failures
because the world doesn’t know
it could have lost me
not so long ago.
Poetry for failures
because the world does lose
people every day
less resilient than I.
Trust me
when I warn you
that anything-
absolutely anything-
can get inside your empty
if you leave to neglect and waste
your interior castles.
Become your own fortress
with towers of community.
Be ready
to slam down your portcullis
when evil wants to play.
Find friendship. Find passion.
Pick a pencil up or get onto a podcast.
Make music. Play trivia.
Fill yourself with only those things that nourish you.
And…
Never get too Hungry.
Never get too Angry
Never get too Lonely.
Never get too Tired.
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HALT keeps me going too. Nice, honest approach and I love “But they are not designed/to be forever states.”
I’ve loved the concept ever since I heard about it, and it was good to form a poem around it. I’m glad that you enjoyed this.
“Trust me
when I warn you
that anything-
absolutely anything-
can get inside your empty”
Amen, brother!
Thank you so much for highlighting that section, the heart of the poem for me.
Very honest and candid!
Thank you so much!
Well done! The kind of poem you have read a few times to get the full effect. One question: Fourth stanza from the bottom: “can get inside your empty/if you leave to neglect and waste” I there a word missing after “empty?”
Actually, that’s not a bad call out on the word “empty.” Functionally, the proper word would be “emptiness,” but I never once considered using that (here, or in yesterday’s poem, too, I use “empty” instead of “emptiness.”)
Reflecting on why I did it this way, I think I just don’t like the -ness syllable here. I feel it’s softness can cheapen the impact I want the word to have. There’s a difference to me between saying “you feel emptiness inside” vs. a more direct “you are empty.”
Perhaps in future revisions, I’ll capitalize the word to help differentiate it from normal speech. Regardless, thank you for the comments and the thoughtful question!
So interesting how certain forms of words just sound right to us, but may not resonate that way with others. I have done that as well, going back and forth with the feeling vs. the correct, and then going with what works for me. Good call! I love the echo of words throughout (hallow/hollow). Nicely done!
I greatly appreciate your thoughts and encouragement on the word choice. I would never have thought twice about it if it wasn’t pointed out to me. Glad you enjoyed the poem!
I enjoyed reading about the process here.
reads like a song
I definitely felt my writing shifting toward the musicality of the concept. I imagine the “Never get…” lines as anthemic shouting/screaming.
I love how you turned the HALT principle into this rhythmic, chant-like warning that feels like a song. Raw and real — thank you for sharing it.
I love the “never” anaphora! But oh, oh, OH —
Now I’m hollow,
so hollow,
and what was hallowed
is conflagration–
now there’s a man
who never learned
how to overcome his own heat.
3rd and 4th lines, truly inspired!
Some years back in a poetry group I was told, “Never write poetry about writing poetry,” which I thought was odd (and I did it anyway LoL) THEN I found out “ars poetica” is an entire genre of writing poems about writing poetry!
Poetry for failures
because the world does lose
people every day
Yes, yes, yes. Thank you for sharing this heart-felt poem!
The relatability of the difficulty of following one’s own advice. You made it real.