Suspicious Death Haibun
The thing that haunts me is I didn’t even know the man’s name. Didn’t know he was only 4 years older than me. Didn’t realize that it was his son who was banned from our property. Didn’t hear the sirens or see the spinning lights on the emergency vehicles called to do a wellness check. I didn’t know any of this despite he only lived three doors down.
I still wouldn’t know now if Rhonda hadn’t stopped me as I scurried inside my place. Rhonda is the good neighbor who waters my poor impulse flowers. She’s the one who hadn’t seen him since Sunday. Who noticed the flies. Who called 911. She’s the one who shared the pain of discovery and fear of shady death– windows closed, air conditioner off, signs of struggle– in our peaceful complex. So what’s worse- to know or to be oblivious?
My world sharpens, clarifies
Claustrophobic knowledge
A small world threatened
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Wow! So vivid and disturbing. Good work.
Oh I didn’t think about needing a content warning! Is there a way to go back and add one?
I don’t see the need for a content warning.
Shew. I appreciate that. I should have thought though.
This amazing haibun draws the reader into a profound moment. The stream of consciousness tempo and grammatical structuring in the prose conveys the shock and grief and even guilt that would come to anyone who encounters an event like this. The last question in the prose punctuates the doubt and confusion. The haiku form captures the sudden intrusion of an indifferent world into a hectic life and quickens the prose extremely well.
Oh my goodness!
I still wouldn’t know now if Rhonda hadn’t stopped me as I scurried inside my place. Rhonda is the good neighbor who waters my poor impulse flowers. She’s the one who hadn’t seen him since Sunday. Who noticed the flies.
“Scurried!” I have great affection for vivid verbs. And “the good neighbor who waters my poor impulse flowers” where poor has more than one interpretation! Same with “shady,” more than one meaning here.
Well done!!!
Thank you! I appreciate the encouragement!
Oh man. That is intense. I actually really love the tone of this. And the humor, and all of these very human feelings.
Thank you!
So much tension in this piece. Well done, Shauna!
Thank you!