The Deep
night falls slow
moves like a shadow fleet in the darkness
stealthy, precise
cuts through thick air undetected
nightwatch drifts asleep
swaying with ocean tides, missed warning
blasting munitions fire
slumbering sailors sink in sea swell deep
10 thoughts on "The Deep"
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H.A., powerful message in your words. You have penned a winner!
Thank you, John.
I like how sneakily the danger is felt: stealthy, missed.. the couplets feel like swaying waves
Thanks, Gaby. I was watching the news reports about the U.S. strikes on boats that supposedly have “illicit cargo”.
What a haunting poem. The final couplet explodes almost out of nowhere.
Thank you, Nancy!
so quiet, so loud
so luminous on the page.
so dark.
Perfect title.
“The Deep”
Thanks, Coleman. Yeah, watching those news stories unfold over the past few months drew this one out. Thanks for your kind words and for taking the time to stop by to read.
Echo all that have replied before me. I love the clean clarity in the couplets with shorter lines on top and expanding in second line. Heartbreaking: “slumbering sailors sink in sea swell deep”
Thanks, Pam! I’m glad you enjoyed this one. Even the saddest news stories can provide some inspiration. I appreciate the care you give to each read.