The Plight Of Woman
an erasure poem from an excerpt of “Twenty Thousand Leauges Under The Sea” by Jules Verne
The light astonished me.
And I distinguished
gradations of
obscurity.
Truly,
the impression
of the sun.
Shall I be believed when I say
I was broad daylight sown with the
impalpable dust of
degrees?
Darkness should help, outlined
in the distance—a tapestry at
ten in the morning.
The touch of light
as through a prism.
Shell- shaded edges, a feast for
complication: green, yellow, orange,
violet, indigo and blue. In one word:
admiration.
I want better. (I talk
to myself, more air than wise.)
Various clusters of brilliant
grief prickle under
me,
inexhaustible.
But we were bound to walk, so we went on,
a band of us, in sun and fiery
darkness.
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Much love to Jen Daugherty for the prompt!
Love back ♥
“feast for
complication”
Felt called out somehow here in this line (haha).
Also, whew: “in sun and fiery
darkness.”
I love this. Am amazing erasure poem conveying a totally different meaning from the original.
Well-done. Usually when I write these, I find myself revising a lot by erasing more and more until I really find my poem. Good luck with this one.
So many lines to admire here.
Oh this is great – I’ve never done an erasure poem but now I want to!