The Rapids
We don’t know what we’re doing & the raft seems impossibly light, far too flimsy to carry us. But when we push off from the riverbank, things go well enough. Soon the current catches us and we’re off, no paddling needed, the water quickening with each bend of the river. There are rapids to negotiate, the roar of the white water getting louder & louder. At last we come to the edge of a vast waterfall and plunge right over it into an even vaster sky, weightless, gliding, holding hands as we shout with joy indistinguishable from terror into the sudden silence.
Then the earth comes up to meet us & it seems we fall asleep. Time passes. Hours, certainly. Maybe days, months, years.
When I wake, finally, on that stony shore, you & the raft are gone, though I can see your footprints leading into the water. I wait & I wait & you don’t come back. After a while I sit on the bank with my eyes closed, my head in my hands, wondering what I’ll do when night comes.
At last I open my eyes & can just see, far upriver, the place we came from. I get to my feet, & because it seems like the thing to do, I stand at the edge & wave. Then I turn downstream & walk on, picking my way through the rocks.
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Oh Kevin,,.
Wonderful wonderful!!
You write so well.
This is a delicate dance
made for stepping lightly into your stream. 😍
“Then the earth comes up to meet us & it seems we fall asleep”
Well penned poet.
[Full stop]
Thanks Coleman!
What a ride! I especially love this:
“weightless, gliding, holding hands as we shout with joy indistinguishable from terror into the sudden silence.”
That made my heart stop.
Thanks H.A.!
”because it seems like the thing to do, I stand at the edge & wave” 🤍
❤️
Kevin — This conveys many stories and possibilities from all-embracing to the very personal. And the first stanza leaves me breathless. Well done!
Thanks Mary! Glad you see it as universal or at least relatable. I aim for that whenever possible.
Beautiful! This works!
Thanks Mike!
Is this real? Because I want it to be.
Love: “Then the earth comes up to meet us & it seems we fall asleep.”
And yessss to that last stanza.
It’s “real” to me in at least one sense, Pam, although not the literal kind. Glad you seem to be finding something in it.
“Then the earth comes up to meet us & it seems we fall asleep. Time passes”.
Love the evocative spirit of this piece
Thanks Linda!
Beautiful, Kevin! I can see this as a dream, or a comment on life.
Thanks Nancy!
Yes, I agree with Nancy. It feels so specific and real, and metaphorical all at the same time!
Thanks Pauletta! That’s just what I hoped.
I like how you’ve used form in this piece to extend it, as it could go on. Great ending too.
……Then I turn downstream & walk on, picking my way/ through the rocks.
Thanks Linda!
Exciting and heartbreaking. You feel the rocks under the feet as strong as time and love passing. Wonderful.
Thanks Fanny!
This poem is quite a rush, and that wave is priceless!
Thanks Sylvia!
Wow – I have had moments like this but no words to describe them.
Thanks Wayne! I worried that no one would get this piece. Glad I was wrong.
a dream about losing control and finding it again. . . on your own
Thanks for that, Gaby! Astute as always.
Trips down river or down dreams, the adventure in words carries us. Great ending, with rocks.
Thanks Larry! Tell Johnny about this poem, will you? It’s not remotely accurate, probably, but maybe he’ll get a kick out of it anyway.
Your storytelling shines. I also feel like tender and roughness of “picking my way through the rocks.”
Thanks Shaun!
This is beautiful, Kevin. The feelings of helplessness and then the determination to move forward really speaks to me. And fun to read your prose.
Thanks Bill!
Been there Done that! thank you for opening up my RAPIDS Folder what a long strange trip its’ been . . .
Thanks Darlene!
What a breathtaking re-recreation of the experience of whitewater rafting. I also like how it feels both literal and metaphorical. So well done, Kevin.
Thanks Karen!