Tomorrow’s Song
Wind
Blows like a gentle secret
Combs like a lioness cleans her cubs
Rushes like a dancing emerald sea
Howls like a Wild West train
Water
Taps like an impatient finger
Trickles like a dream-weary ballad
Patters like a snare drum line
Crashes like two colliding rams
Lightning
Rumbles like a laughing sailcloth
Webs like a fractured pane of glass
Strikes like a dying bulb
Booms like the cannon cries
Fire
Crackles like discarded paper
Hisses like a hydraulic press
Pops like young hands on bubble wrap
Roars like a bright and raging forge
If we listen, we will hear
That Nature has a melody
But it’s what we do today
That preserves Her voice for
Tomorrow’s Song
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Absolutely 💯
Love the form and layout.
Brilliant concept !!!
Perfectly executed.
Pro level!
Massive compliment. Thank you, Coleman!
Lovely in your execution of form.
Thank you for reading, Rebecca!
Eric, these descriptions are just marvelous! Loved them all –
probably my fav – “Webs like a fractured pane of glass” although the bubble wrap was a close second. Yes! Yes! to your last stanza! Wonderful write.
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Sylvia! Thank you.
Option to present poem in picture book form in order also to cultivate the child’s use of strong verbs, not to mention to lesson summed up at the end
I considered it, once upon a time, with ‘The Pickle Farm’ actually. Thanks for your support!
Classical elements of the universe in perfect poetic form, with descriptive similes to remind us of our responsibility to care for the earth. Well written.
Wonderful feedback. Thank you, Virginia!
I love this but I’m so jealous too!
Thanks for taking the time to read and leave me with encouraging feedback, Deanna.
Love: “Howls like a Wild West train”, “Trickles like a dream-weary ballad”, “Webs like a fractured pane of glass”, “Roars like a bright and raging forge”
Yes to those last three lines!
Of course, you would like the train, Pam!
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Thanks, Pam!
“Nature has a melody” and the call to preserve it- Wow. Wonderful! I love the form and rhythm and rich imagery throughout!
Thank you, Michele! Kind words.
I truly enjoy the descriptive choice of words and the elemental and animal comparison.