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During a summer thunder storm
frantic robins more brown than red
flew into and out of wildly waving pine branches
flew into and out of wet white clover and grass
and as I watched finally I saw what they saw—
their not quite grown fledglings
one huddled as close to the pine’s trunk
as possible, another in the pounded grass,
others, I supposed, higher in the tree
and some floundering in the rain
their little wet bodies puffed out
bracing with what life gives.
Melva Sue Priddy
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Ooooo this one is interesting. The robins feel human in the way they’re approaching their problem. Also, reflective of how one thing that seems fine to us can be a nightmare to another. I appreciate this a lot.
The f’s blend into p’s and then then the two work together. I like it!
The babies are “bracing” with vitality, puffed up against the storm. I relate to their overprotective parents.
I read the “pounded grass” as ponding grass or ponded grass, but either way I like your narrative.
Love “wildly waving pine branches” and especially “white wet clover”! I could see and feel the terror of this moment for the mother birds and their babies. Lovely!