The Candlewick and the Cow
It was long ago at the Music Box
A small tavern that had no locks
There the newest candle maker
And the journeyman meat cutter
Met to share a glass of her wine
She asked him are you not dizzy
Pouring the wine he answered
This was asked of the dancers
The dancers spoke even then the wind
We are still it is the world that turns
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I like how the unlocked tavern symbolizes openness and trust and how the dizziness is the cost and gift of being awake to life.
Thank you Jeremy for seeing in it the reading of it.
I like the way this poem feels. We get a scene where we briefly meet a few characters, and yet we somehow know them well, especially with that last line.
this poet knew she was a keeper by her opening line
“are you not dizzy”
The new candlemaker was wise beyond her years.
The meatcutter prays her continued blessing with tears.
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“and yet we somehow know them well”
Thank you
Coleman, the last line is especially powerful, ” We are still it is the world that turns.”
Good morning John Thank-you.
it comes from the sufi tradition.
Rumi and Hafiz — so much wisdom in those two souls.
Nice, Coleman. You are at home in these fable spaces. You make it work.
Thaks Kevin, I think another episode of the big-fish tale might be on the horizon. And and and……”the story of iron and stone” got picked up. YAY!!!!!
Im still dancing !! 😆
CONGRATULATIONS!
I like this! It works smoothly
Thank you Mike 😀
Once I removed all the punctuation it worked, which was a happy surprise. Its difficult qith conversation. Happy happy joy.
Yay ! It works….lol
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Echo the comments of others before.
Love: ” A small tavern that had no locks” It says a lot in so few words and sets the tone of what unfolds.
Thank you pam. Yes there is aome kind of global echo. The sufi poetry had that economy and two sky process like haiku and ka’ona….it is fascinating….I liked that when it arrived too 😄 thanks so kich for deep reading.
this is so creative and enjoy the form and rhyming! I can really see how much you are enjoying LexPoMo this year!
Linda Thank-you. Yes 😀
Coleman, I’m going to keep reading this over and over. The feel is a bit like verses in the Old Testament that need to be delved for all their possible meanings. (On of my Jewish friends once told me, “It doesn’t matter whether or not there was a Noah and an ark. What matters are the layers of meaning in the midrash.” 😎 )
The spare nature of this poem enhances it’s message, and yes, that wonderful closure. Thank you for sharing this!
E.E. Thank you so very much. For your words and for your understanding. Gregory Orr has a wonderful quote that I have been ruminating on this year.
” River inside the river.
World within the world.
All we have is words
To reveal the rose
That the rose obscures.”
I love the fantastical air this gives off, and that line about the dancers standing still as the world turns around them.