Observation from the Discard Pile
You pick one
and use it
however you please
then leave it
facedown
and forgotten.
The Queen of Hearts.
A measly two.
Playing card
or person –
it’s all the same to you.
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I love your title and the observation is pretty brutal. Well done.
Thank you!
fresh metaphor
Thank you!
Chelsie your savage side is wonderful. I knew it in 3/4s in a piece you sent in for Yearling this year – but this? This is on another level.
Thanks! The one you are referring to and this one both kind of fell out my head almost in one piece (not sure what that says about me…lol.) But I wish I could make that happen more often!
it says you are a genius and a scholar
wow. this is really powerful. I love it!
Thanks!
Great one, Chelsie. That last line is like a spearpoint.
Thanks! Glad it seems to be reading the way I wanted it to.
Good stuff. Who hasn’t felt discarded by someone? A fine extended metaphor, and I like the rhyme at the end, too.
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Love this simple extended metaphor!
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Yes! So relatable.
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Love the rhythm of the first half, reads like a slow gallop!
thanks!
Really nice, Chelsie! Great title, rhyme at the end, overall tone. Well done!
Thanks!!