Audio Visual
The music is blaring, but not enough for the lyrics
to be heard clearly over the chitter of the register,
the plastic-haired sportscaster’s enthusiastic play-
by-play from the television, the din of town drunks
clinging lopsidedly to the bar, beer-brave voices
chuffing and squealing, accompanying the lone
man with a guitar and a chipped tip jar, careless
curls falling damp over his forehead, perched atop
a three-legged stool and singing from the soul with
his eyes closed. I close mine too, hoping the loss
of sight will quell this feeling that the insectile gaze
of every pair of eyes is skittering across my hide
but instead it amplifies the atmosphere, this sharp
edge intensity, until I can almost taste the colors
in the room. The early summer breeze creeps lazily
towards my corner table through open doors, twining
itself around the sweating lowball glass in a sultry
embrace. The stout old fashioned begrudgingly begins
to give up its coolness, orange twist and cherry red
treasures sunk to the amber bottom—a watery house
bourbon grave—and I try to imagine myself there
languid limbs floating weightless in the glass, engulfed
in melting ice and bitters that drown every other sound
except that sweetly spiced voice, and when his final
song ends, I’m the only one who claps.
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Wow! This poem puts me right there in the bar with
“the insectile gaze
of every pair of eyes is skittering across my hide” and
“The stout old fashioned begrudgingly begins
to give up its coolness, orange twist and cherry red
treasures sunk to the amber bottom—a watery house
bourbon grave—and I try to imagine myself there…”
So good!
Thanks so much 🙂
Ohhh Jenny! The word tap’s fully open now, isn’t it? I’m so happy you’re doing LexPoMo. So much to love here… plastic-haired and the rhyme of plastic and sportscaster… beer brave… chipped tip… insectile / skittering / hide (LOVE)…
I read it as “a watery house” // “a bourbon grave” … totally different vibe and rhythm than this poem but I feel like you should lift that concept and use it to prompt another poem!
The ending is perfect. So, too, is the title. — I’d do the poem as 1 long stanza. Just dump the chunk of it on us! xo
Feeling verbose 😛
You really set the scene and place us right there with you so well
I appreciate that! In certain situations, it feels like my senses are all turned up to 1,000. Annoying, but good for remembering details 🙂
Jenny – How you set a scene is wonderful and dizzying! It puts the reader sitting right next to you (and clapping with you). Love this – The stout old fashioned begrudgingly begins/to give up its coolness, orange twist and cherry red /
treasures sunk to the amber bottom—a watery house /
bourbon grave – wow!