Morning Dream
(A radical erasure of “Two Girls Ago” by Lucie Brock-Broido)
exquisite
wren at dawn
I loved
on the way home dark
weeping
flipping back
kissing in the field
no miss
no threat yet
8 thoughts on "Morning Dream"
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Beautiful! And I love how the white space works the meaning.
You’re so kind! This was my 10:30 pm- gotta -get- a- poem- in- effort. I love doing erasures, though.
Th is so nice, Ellen – I especially like being lulled by the assonance in the last lines.
This is . . .
Beautiful. I love exquisite/wren at dawn. I have a particular relationship with wrens.
Lovely.
This is gorgeous, Ellen. And that “yet” at the end, so suggestive.
Yes!!! to:
no threat yet